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Post by Ty the Squirtle on Nov 8, 2020 20:56:16 GMT -8
Character Name: Aeneas Solais Gender: Male Age: 13 Height: 4 ft 11 in (approx 150 cm) Weight: 100 lbs (45.35 kg) Hometown: Glosterrice Town Trainer Class: Explorer Hair Color & Style: He has short brunette hair. He likes to keep it combed back to make himself look good and proper. He sometimes likes to add a tiny bit of hair gel to keep his signature hairstyle that way. Eyes: He has round-shaped green eyes that don't show any heavy lid nor stress (ignore the profile pic that shows turquoise eyes). Clothing/Accessories: His typical wear consists of an orange shirt-jacket that has zippers, a black athletic turtleneck shirt that tightly wraps around his body, brown pants, black gloves that nearly reach his elbow, and knee-high black boots that help him to tread on any terrain. He was initially against wearing them because it made him feel too athletic when he knows that he’s not physically fit, but his traveling companions really think it makes him cooler that way. He carries a brown sack backpack that carries more than it looks. It carries a lot of stuff, but his sack backpack will typically have these: extra clothes, a smartphone that functions as a Pokédex, a Holo Caster, and a smartphone, his laptop, books about legends and myths, trainer essentials such as Poke Balls and potions and things to clean himself such as a comb or toothbrush. General Appearance: Aeneas is short for his age, which he’s personally not proud of because the average boy at his age is usually taller than him. People may mistake him for a child due to his short height and his adorable-looking face. Despite being short, he shows a light physique and can be wrongfully judged as fit. Unfortunately, he’s terrible in hand-eye coordination and in endurance, and Aeneas will tire quickly if he’s forced to use his muscles. Because he seldom goes outside for leisure, Aeneas doesn’t have any blemishes or scars or dryness. He’s also a clean person, and he will make sure that all of his clothes are generally spotless. People see him as a polite person, from his soft and down-to-earth tone to how he properly postures himself. For example, where his traveling friends would slouch or hunch forward, Aeneas will never do that.
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Post by Ty the Squirtle on Nov 8, 2020 20:57:09 GMT -8
Personality Aeneas seeks to stand equally amongst his siblings, whom each of themselves achieved a lot so that his family can finally notice him. A combination of being set aside for his siblings’ glossier accolades and his timidness makes Aeneas not feel wanted. He’ll constantly hunt for some form of praise, even if it means taking on any task that requires getting stepped on the entire way. Aeneas is not athletic. He also hides that he’s absolutely terrible at sports and fears retribution for not being manly enough. Despite that, Aeneas is a studious person that loves learning everything he can about the world. His preferred pastime is watching documentaries about the myths of Godai, astronomy, and history in general. He’s also good at playing video games. Aeneas is timid throughout much of his life. He’s terrible at making friends, running away when the first thought in his head is that he looks so awkward talking to them. In reality, the other classmates think of him as a good person because of his modest and down-to-earth personality; Aeneas doesn’t have a lot of self-confidence. When alone, Aeneas likes to daydream and get distracted by his own imaginative thoughts. Despite liking to stay indoors, Aeneas dreams of venturing outside and wishes to discover the world's mysteries. He’s a curious person, and he will love to try anything completely new to him. Shove him out of his comfy bubble, and Aeneas will initially hate it. But his curiosity will get the better of him, and he’ll freely wander off his own to search for something exciting. |
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Post by Ty the Squirtle on Nov 8, 2020 20:57:19 GMT -8
History Aeneas was born in Glosterrice Town. His parents, Martin and Venus, worked as nurses while the two raised five different siblings from oldest to youngest: River, Osiris, Craig, Gabriela, and Aeneas. Out of the five siblings, Aeneas is the most well-nurtured and the most sheltered. He loved hearing stories and tales his eldest sibling River tells him every time before he goes to bed. Aeneas loved playing outdoors, especially when he played hide-and-seek with Osiris and Craig. When the youngest member of the Solais family attended school, he sought protection and advice from his sister and guardian Gabriela. However, little Aeneas soon found himself alone as his siblings grew up. When River graduated from secondary school and moved to college, Aeneas learned by himself how to read so he won’t get bored by himself. When Osiris moved to college and Craig journeyed away to be a Pokémon trainer against his parents’ wishes, Aeneas moved from playing outdoors to playing video games and watching entertaining documentaries. When Gabriela attended high school, Aeneas found himself all alone with no friends. Aeneas proved himself to be an academic in school, but he never found the courage to make close friends. He stood out as the loner in class. He never liked sports because he’s too insecure to be compared to the more athletic kids in his class. Even at home, his life felt lonely. His parents’ attention shifted from Aeneas to his older siblings: River with med school while Osiris and Craig joined college for their own reasons. Whenever Aeneas tried to brag about the wonders of video games or Godaian myths, his parents dismissed it and told him always to keep studying and get good grades. Feeling that whatever was in his mind didn't mean anything, Aeneas learned to keep his thoughts to himself. At one point, Aeneas joined the local school’s math team. However, he only joined one tournament and earned a participation medal because he never worked hard in competition. Compared to his siblings, who Martin and Venus loved to flaunt their achievements all over, Aeneas only got a small congratulations. He soon left the math team because he felt like he couldn't fit in. Unlike his older siblings, his parents gave Aeneas free reign to do whatever he wants as long as he studies (which wasn't hard for him). If he wanted more books and video games, his parents bought it for him. If he wanted to stay home (which he always chooses) instead of going out to attend parties, his parents allowed him. If Aeneas wanted a Pokémon, then his parents would give him one, which he did. His first Pokémon and true friend was Aurora, a Swablu that truly listened to him, cared for him, and stood by his side. The Swablu, who eventually evolved into an Altaria, earned her title as the family pet. At 13, Aeneas sought to be a trainer and grow more than being the same pathetic self. His curiosity and wonder grew when he talked to Craig about his Pokémon journey and how fun it was to visit new places. Aeneas thought Craig accomplished a lot especially when his older brother gathered plenty of gym badges, and he wished to be as awesome as Craig in his own way as well. So, he asked his parents if he would allow him to go on a Pokémon journey. To his surprise, they easily said yes. Now with his Altaria in hand, Aeneas readied himself to journey out to the unknown world. |
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Post by Ty the Squirtle on Nov 8, 2020 20:57:34 GMT -8
Inventory Dians:  2,870 {Medicine}  3 Antidotes  1 Paralyze Heal  2 Awakenings  1 Ice Heal  4 Potions  2 Revives {Poké Balls}  2 Poké Balls  2 Great Balls  1 Ultra Ball  1 Apricorn {Battle Items}  1 Wide Lens  1 Quick Claw  1 Altarianite  1 Water Gem {Berries}  3 Oran Berries  3 Kelpsy Berries {Other Items}  1 Super Repel  2 Max Repels  13 Cheap Experience Cookies 5 Tasty Experience Cookies 3 Gourmet Experience Cookies  1 Rare Candy  1 Dusk Stone {Technical Machines, Technical Records, and Hidden Machines}  TM 154 Brine  TM 051 Steel Wing  TM 098 Power-Up Punch TM 157 Drain Punch  TM 028 Dig  TM 150 Secret Power TM 010 Hidden Power (x2) TM 044 Rest TM 021 Frustration TM 120 Mimic  TM 138 Icy Wind  TR 085 Work Up HM 01 Cut {Treasures}N/A {Ingredients}N/A {Key Items}  Pokédex  Journal  Poké Ball Camp  Smartphone/Holo Caster |
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Post by Ty the Squirtle on Nov 8, 2020 20:57:44 GMT -8
Trainer Advancement Advancement Points: 0 Tier 0 Seeing the Sights: (0/15) Making Friends: (0/15) Green Thumb: (0/15) To Be The Best: (0/15) Silver Tongue:(0/15) Nursing: (0/15) Gift Giving: (0/20) Parental Instincts: (0/20) Genetic Key: (0/20) TLC: (0/25) Technology Buff: (0/25) Oooh Shiny: (0/30) Survivalist: (0/15) Treasure Hunter: (0/15) Gourmet: (0/15) |
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Post by Ty the Squirtle on Nov 8, 2020 20:57:59 GMT -8
Pokémon in Party Total EXP Gained: 418 {Aurora}  Aurora
Given at Level 31
Current Level: 31Species Name: Altaria
Gender: Female
Type: Dragon/Flying
Ability: Natural Cure
Height: 3'07" (1.1 m)
Weight: 45.4 lbs. (20.6 kg)
EXP Rate: Erratic
EXP Gauge: (419/446)
EXP Gained: 418
Current Level: 31
Division: D5
Health: Intermediate
Total Stats: 434
- Attack: 70
- Defense: 100
- Sp. Attack: 80
- Sp. Defense: 109 (25%)
- Speed: 75
Vitamins Used: None | Moveset:
1. Growl
1. Peck
3. Astonish
5. Sing
7. Fury Attack
9. Safeguard
11. Disarming Voice
14. Mist
17. Round
20. Natural Gift
23. Take Down
26. Refresh
30. Pluck
30. Dragon Dance
Unique Moves:
- Rest (TM)
- Hidden Power [Fire] (TM)
Item: N/A |
Aurora was the family pet of the Solais family and now Aeneas' signature Pokémon. A kind and motherly Pokémon, Aurora likes to sing praises to her trainer and hug him with her fluffy wings. |
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Post by Ty the Squirtle on Nov 8, 2020 20:58:23 GMT -8
Pokémon in Storage To be updated if Aeneas carries more than 6 Pokémon |
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Post by Ty the Squirtle on Nov 8, 2020 20:59:01 GMT -8
Journals
From Start: PokéDex, Journal, Holo Caster, Town Map
Reaping Titus Hastur: 418 EXP from the reap, 2,870, 2 Poké Balls, 2 Great Balls, 1 Ultra Ball, 1 Apricorn, 1 Dawn Stone, 1 Dusk Stone, TM 154 Brine, TM 051 Steel Wing, TM 098 Power-Up Punch, TM 157 Drain Punch, TM 028 Dig, TM 150 Secret Power, TM 010 Hidden Power (x2), TM 044 Rest, TM 021 Frustration, TM 120 Mimic, TM 138 Icy Wind, TR 085 Work Up, HM 01 Cut, 1 Rare Candy, 3 Oran Berries, 3 Kelpsy Berries, 3 Antidotes, 1 Paralyze Heal, 2 Awakenings, 1 Ice Heal, 4 Potions, 2 Revives, 1 Water Gem, 1 Super Repel, 2 Max Repels, 13 Cheap Experience Cookies, 5 Tasty Experience Cookies, 3 Gourmet Experience Cookies, 1 Wide Lens, 1 Quick Claw, 1 Altarianite, 1 Muscle Band, 1 Poison Barb, Poké Ball Camp, Item Finder App, PokéWave App, 1 Swablu (evolved into an Altaria) |
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Post by Mr. Johnapillar on Nov 19, 2020 0:02:20 GMT -8
Hey~ Thank you for being patient.
Before I get too in depth, some of the easy stuff out of the way~ I just wanna say that you still put your total EXP for your pokemon. A level 31 with no EXP added onto it has an EXP gauge of 413/446, not 419, and I think we both would prefer if you kept that extra little exp lol. Make sure you put how much EXP you got from Titus in your Journal as well as putting it in your Pokemon's sections.
Also, don't forget the move Pluck at whatever level his Altaria evolved at~
I'll get to reviewing his character details soon~ He's a skinny kid though!
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Post by Mr. Johnapillar on Nov 19, 2020 21:32:48 GMT -8
Okay~ thanks for those simple changes~
So, generally speaking great job at keeping this concise. There are very few if any extraneous sentences or words and it makes your text come across as dense, which I know you were going for so great job!
I honestly don't have that much to touch up on too. The biggest thing is be careful with your use of the words "Naturally" or "Normal," because I have no idea what that means. The world is a big place and is full of many subjectively normal things. What does it mean that Aeneas is "Naturally sweet?" What does "normal" physique mean? In what ways is he not athletic? Like does he lack endurance, is he uncoordinated, does he sweat profusely, is he self conscious? Bowlers can be considered athletic, how is Aeneas unlike them? Taking time to say that he has "normal" eyes is also a little bit hamhanded. I think what you mean is "round shaped eyes without a heavy lid" or something along those lines. Eye shapes vary a bunch in humans, it's okay to specify a couple details besides color. It can also imply more about your authorial intent and detract from the story.
Otherwise if I was being really nitpicky I'd suggest you find a way, between personality and history, to show how Aeneas is determined or otherwise motivated to leave home. Right now it's just an implication that he would be made fun of and then all of a sudden he's worked up the nerve to ask his parents to not stay in school, take the family pet, and live in pokemon centers and a tent when he was previously completely averse to the outside. There is plenty of motivation possible, especially based on our conversations, but it would be helpful to have them be specific. Just some statements about What Aeneas is feeling and/or why. You did a great job with this at the start of his personality and when you describe him as not athletic.
If you do these then Aeneas should have a permanent description of both his highs and lows of character, and feel more distinct. You've already done so much and I really like how you've characterized a 13 year old character. He feels just as awkward as all of us remember 13 to be. When you add in some extra details to make him more than awkward, he'll really pop!
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Post by Mr. Johnapillar on Nov 20, 2020 21:20:12 GMT -8
Hey! this is really amazing to see~ Thank you for not answering all my questions literally.
You're really good at keeping things dense, you answered all those questions I asked with just a handful of words, truly lovely~
We've no choice but to offer Approval 1/2~
Great job Ty~
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Post by Snow on Nov 24, 2020 0:36:50 GMT -8
Hey Titus! I really like what you did with this character! I noticed you went with swablu/alteria, is this going to be the dragon trainer you were mentioning or something different?
I'm really excited to give you you're 2/2 but there only one thing you need to change! The Rotom Phone. They don't exist in Godai! Just switch that to the holocaster and you'll be ready to go!
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